Jim's journal
We were all sitting round the campfire, a tiny speck of light in between the mist, its embers
crackling like the guns going off the day before.I wondered what had happened to Carl, my
german soldier friend who got sent to the sick tent. knots are getting tied in my heart. I miss him
like he was part of my family but I am glad to have Nipper, my very loyal messenger dog friend
here as well as the other soldiers here too. Just as we were going to bed I heard footsteps
behind me I spin around I see no one at all just mist and the lovely flamingo pink sky. When
suddenly out of the mist I saw…..Carl!! I hugged him tight [ Not too tight because his wound was
still healing.] and invited him to come in my tent to sleep for the night.
This is a really awesome piece of writing Elise and you have done really well in adding in punctation to aid in the effect of retelling of the story. The description of the location comes through really well. I look forward to seeing more of your writing!
ReplyDeleteHi Elise, This is a beautiful piece of writing.Wow it really put an image in my head. You obviously put a lot of thought into this and it shows. Keep it up, what comes next? Sharron
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